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My 2nd "Real" Rap ft. Julius Luciano, Hisham & Faris
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Whuttup y’all ?
I’m proud to present my 2nd attempt at "real rapping" ...

I didn't know where to put this, but cuz it has Luchi, I put it here ... Also, to get more views and comments ... I hope it's cool with u Effex ...

Got a lil’ surprise on this one …… !!
I’m not gonna be the only one writin’ for y’all !!
I may as well call this rap “The Carnivores”, featuring my homies Hisham, Faris, and (brace yourself) Julius Luciano from the Hip-Hop group “The Horse Shoe G.A.N.G.” who actually wrote his verse exclusively for me!

Well, without further ado, here’s the real deal (Don’t forget to read THE WHOLE THING and COMMENT – like who has the best verse or so – COMMENTS ARE APPRECIATED) :


The Carnivores

[Verse One : Hisham]

I’m a Carnivore, waiting with forks and knives at your door /
You escape & crawl on the floor down the corridor /
But know deep in your heart, you obsolete like a Dinosaur /
My armor draws, on my past life, when I wrote The Art of War /
My thoughts are pure, never go though Moral wringers /
Pull the trigger with my middle finger, add insult to injury /
My mind’s free with divine speech, you can’t censor me /
Sensing me brings doom, fear for your testes, G /
Battle raps so vintage like we living on vinyl /
High disciples, ice you with my bars and smite you /
A lyrical surgeon, open brain, remove your burdens /
Douse it with electrical surges, until a crazier version emerges /
Disperse your mental matter, purge, burn and serve it /
on a silver platter. Your teeth clatter, blood spatters /
You reach a madder state, I fabricate and shape /
verses with so much fire, your screen shows heat waves .. !!

[Hook : Faris]

We’re Gun Fu masters of disaster /
Holocaust factors like nuclear reactors /
We’re the Carnivores who’ve come to end your chapter …. !

[Verse Two : Ahmad X-Terminator]

My lyrical skill will make you cry for more, spinning your spinal cord /
Hurtin’ your heart , lunging at your lungs, with cutting vocal swords /
On the verge of insanity, if you choose to step up and battle me /
Using my razor-sharp mentality to bite you disfiguring your anatomy! /
The sickest individual who be slicin’ you with syllables /
Dazzling with rituals, poking your optics, blinding your visuals /
Venomous breath, as I creep up and start gobbling parts of you /
Demolishing particles with my array of astonishing arsenals ! /
Tearin’ through your skin, rippin’ off your limbs , you be left in pieces /
Verbal swordsman orphanin’ your son, chewin’ till I see you in my feces /
Topped the Eiffel Tower with my evil powers, takin’ rap to insane heights /
Speakers get stage fright, every time I break mics ! /
Language gets murdered in plain sight when the wrath of my brain strikes ! /
Feelin’ nervous? I’ll expose your nerves by biting your epidermis ! /
Slammin’ you head first on purpose, writin’ fire melting the Earths’ surface ! /
Immaculate, ain’t no noun or adjective describing how I’ve mastered it /
Precision matched by none livin’, focus is better. Battlin’ me?? Hopeless endeavor … !!!

[Hook : Faris]
We’re Gun Fu masters of disaster /
Holocaust factors like a nuclear reactor /
We’re the Carnivores who’ve come to end your chapter …. !

[Verse Three : Julius Luciano]

I’m literally hard core, I mean I got an adamantium skeleton /
The BODY of work that I’ve created is DARK, without the melanin /
My business, is somethin’ that you rappers shouldn’t meddle in /
I’m dressed to kill, that means I use my jacket pockets to hide the metal in /
I’m a master mind, my will power is stronger than it’s ever been /
Life is a unicycle, without the WILL (wheel) there’s no use pedalin’ /
I spit chemical pesticide, similar to Ahmad, I’m an X-terminator /
I cross out you action heroes, Luciano could X The Terminator /
I select a burnin’ saber as my weapon of choice /
I mean my tongue, cuz it’s hot and sharp, melt ya with words, I dissect with my voice /
We’re a crew of monsters, C.O.B pre-dates ancient Aztecs /
I’ll kill you with one look, my eyes are two pistols, as deadly as techs /
Julius Luchi is a congenital predator, a pathological hunter /
If you’re on a path to kill me, I deem your path illogical, brother /
I’m half man, half tank, I’m an anatomical wonder /
You wanna battle me, that’s a big mistake, an astronomical blunder … !!

[Outro : Ahmad X-Terminator]

We the Carnivores !!
Signin’ off … !!
The Saga , April !!!!
Props to Julius Luchi for joinin’ us on this one ….
Stay tuned for next month …
We ain’t gonna stop ….
Lyrical Murderers !!
We do this in our sleep !!!

Stay tuned for next month as I might have another “murderer” on board …. Kenny Siegel …. And if I’m lucky, I might get CROOKED I !!!

Thanks for the support !!!    8)
COB EZ
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#2
No comments ? Not that good , I guess ?
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#3
I havent listened to the track yet but thats awsome that you got Julius Luciano on the track.
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#4
Can't FULLY judge the verses without hearing them out loud, but it looks sick.
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#5
Thnx guys ....
It's not really a track ... It's meant to be a written ...
I'm just writin' a rap every month and this time I featured Luchi on it ...

I have a few plans to record it on a beat but I doubt that'll happen cuz I don't have the capabilities, and also each one of us has his own style in his rhymes so it's gonna be hard ...
But I'll see ...

@ Aaron : You're just gonna have to read the lyrics and tell me what u think, bro ! Tongue
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#6
next time try getting siegel or capone on it lol!
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#7
Siegel might right for me next month ......
Stay tuned .......
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#8
Well if your're lucky try getting crooked to do a verse lol!
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#9
I'm workin' on that, too, homie lol
Hope I can get him to write a verse for me !
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(04-11-2010, 04:51 AM)xterminator14 link Wrote:Thnx guys ....
It's not really a track ... It's meant to be a written ...
I'm just writin' a rap every month and this time I featured Luchi on it ...

I have a few plans to record it on a beat but I doubt that'll happen cuz I don't have the capabilities, and also each one of us has his own style in his rhymes so it's gonna be hard ...
But I'll see ...

@ Aaron : You're just gonna have to read the lyrics and tell me what u think, bro ! Tongue

Ahh...

I got it, I was confused at first.
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